Writing task 1 The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego California and the rest of the world

Essay topics:

[Writing task 1] - The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts give information about water consumption for three sections (residential, industry and agriculture) and how these figures varied in San Diego, California and the world as a whole.

It is noticeable that more water is consumed by homes usage than the industry in two states of America. By contrast, agriculture made up the vast majority of global water use.

In San Diego and California, there is 60% and 39% of residential water consumption in total compared to 8% of worldwide usage. The opposite can be seen when we look at water consumption for agriculture. This accounts for a massive 69% of water used in global in comparison with only 17% and 28% respectively in San Diego and California.

Such dramatic differences are not be seen for industry segment. The same proportion with 23% of water is used by industry in worldwide and San Diego, whereas the figure for California is recorded 10% higher, at 33%.

Votes
Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 777.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94904458599 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8967939991 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611464968153 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9068908415 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.125 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.625 5.23603664747 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295458677476 0.215688989381 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125971582747 0.103423049105 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916189167051 0.0843802449381 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177098897333 0.15604864568 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722722220451 0.0819641961636 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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