In the modern era, young people do not enter society as soon as the previous decades. This is regarded as a critical factor contributing to the change in their personality and responsibilities. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the question of whether teenagers should be forced to acquire part-time jobs or not. Many people adhere to the view that they should play games, have fun, and enjoy their lives in this period, while others suppose this time is a proper moment for them to learn skills making them able to handle their duties in the future. I firmly believe young adults should take professions. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that adolescents learn different social practices through this approach. Dealing with various types of people or handling ubiquitous tasks, like bank procedures, are some skills that they do not learn in the schools' syllabus. However, they are required eventually when we step into the community, and we are expected to know them as grown-ups. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About ten years ago, when I was thirteen, my mother sent me to work alongside my cousin as his selling assistant in a shoe store. In the evenings, I aided him in trading the commodities by making conversation with customers and gain their interest in our products. Also, In the mornings, I helped him with doing his bank-associated tasks like opening accounts and withdrawing money. Thus, when I became an adult, I had no problems doing my own business, while most of my friends did not, and they always demanded my assistance.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that young people learn earning money is a cumbersome process and they realize its worth. Nowadays, technology has created a variety of different tempting objects that are every child's dream. Although their prices are getting higher and higher, people's desire for obtaining them is becoming more exessive as well. These demands force a lot of burden on parents. On the one hand, if they do not buy them for their beloved kids, they will end up fighting with each other. One the other hand, there are different facets of life that the money should be spent on like procuring food and paying bills. To put in in a more vivid picture, one of my friends, Ali, is the only child and he has been provided with everything he has needed. Last year, he wanted to buy a PlayStation device and asked his parents to buy it for him. They did not accept his plea, so he got mad and after a huge argument, decided to look for a job and purchase one for himself. It took him six months of unwieldy work to accumulate his money to get what he wanted. As a result, he found out that earning money was hard and tried to lower his expectations.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that having young people to participate in part-time occupations is beneficial. Because this way, they learn essential social manners that help them in their future, and also they recognize the genuine significance of wealth and how hard it is to collect it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ebates in this realm is associated with the question of whether teenagers should be forced to acquire p...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...me skills that they do not learn in the schools syllabus. However, they are required ev...
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Line 5, column 78, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to earn'.
Suggestion: to earn
...be mentioned is that young people learn earning money is a cumbersome process and they ...
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Line 5, column 658, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: in
...procuring food and paying bills. To put in in a more vivid picture, one of my friends...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, thus, well, while, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 7.48453608247 321% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 5.05154639175 356% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.03092783505 396% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 82.0 32.9175257732 249% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 26.3917525773 258% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2675.0 937.175257732 285% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 557.0 206.0 270% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80251346499 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 3.78020617076 129% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66723765223 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 312.0 127.690721649 244% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560143626571 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 290.88556701 282% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 1.83505154639 436% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 1.44329896907 624% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 12.6804123711 213% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.7331626325 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0740740741 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6296296296 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 7.41237113402 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0622363316184 0.216113520407 29% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0172274358641 0.0766984524023 22% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0231553815271 0.0603063233224 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0409757931638 0.12726935374 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00835611697016 0.0580467560999 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 41.2886597938 358% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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