In the modern era, friendship is regarded as a crucial factor contributing to the various aspects of people’s lives. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the depth of the friendships that people establish. Many people adhere to the view that having a plethora of friends assists us to become a successful person, while others prefer acquiring just a few friends. Ego, when it comes to my perspective, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that having a few friends with stronger friendship bonds is better. In what follows, I cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that deeper bonds with fewer people gives us friends that we can trust. Building up trust takes a lot of time and endauver. Trusting our friends let us share our feelings and concerns with them and ask about their opinion without being judged. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Four years ago, when I was preparing for the university entrance exam, I suffered from depression. I did not want others to know about it because I did not like to be treated with pity. I told my situation to one of my friends. He faced it logically and aided me to overcome my problem.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that if you have a lot of friends, your responsibilities will be increased as well. When we connect with others, some expectations would be formed around our relationships. We are expected to be there for them anytime they need us. As a result, we will become too busy to do our major responsibilities. For instance, three years ago, one of my friends, named Reza, moved into Tehran to attend unviersity. He tried to make a lot of friends in the first days and succeed. Although he was happy of having plenty of people around, he did not have any time for studying because he spent a considerable part of his spare time with them. As a result, he failed two courses in that semester.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that having limited connections with others is much more beneficial than being cramped by other people. This is because you will have more time with less responsibilities. Plus, you can trust your friends for sharing your concerns with them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, while, for instance, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77037037037 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83572050382 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545679012346 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6821089854 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204052521931 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566286816477 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435793215367 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13657634851 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283013093223 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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