TPO31:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the modern era, technology is regarded as a crucial factor contributing to the growth of the community’s satisfaction. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the question of whether the rapid changes in the world are beneficial for humanity or not. Many people adhere to the view that the growth of technology is ruining our days, while others say humans can not survive without its existence. I firmly believe that the positive contributions of technology dominate its destructive aspects. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that one of the most pronounced achievements of the revolutionary growth of technology is the Internet. Nowadays, most people’s lives are tightly entangled with this network in various facets. It can be used for selling or advertising commodities, establishing multimedia communications, getting news, etc. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Four years ago, when I moved to a distant city to attend university, I became homesick after a while. Because of the unaffordable expenses of traveling, I could not visit my parents regularly which was so painful. As a result, we came up with the solution to use the Skype application to see each other. However it was not as comfortable as actual meetings, it helped me a lot to overcome my depression by keeping in touch with them every day.

Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that the advancement of science has developed public health by curing most of the lethal illnesses. By the introduction of the microscope, a new world appeared to the scientists which led to the discovery of tiny creatures that caused sickness. While in two or three decades ago, people lost their children because of these problems, in the contemporary time, plenty of diseases have been eradicated with vaccines. For instance, about fifty years ago, polio was widespread in my country, and it was the reason for the loss of a considerable portion of the population. After the introduction of the polio vaccine, the loss rate depreciated significantly. As a result of the progress in public sanitation, security stepped into people’s lives and brought them happiness and prosperity.

In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that not only the alterations of the world did not have any bad effects on our lives, but also their contributions have helped humanity to grow and overcome many difficulties. Due to the pervasive use of the Internet and improvements in public healthcare.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ebates in this realm is associated with the question of whether the rapid changes in the world are bene...
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Line 3, column 718, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...he Skype application to see each other. However it was not as comfortable as actual mee...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, for instance, in brief, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18837209302 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19249135969 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567441860465 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4127233507 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.238095238 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135941976421 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352593745458 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402560185558 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752654928014 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314377751759 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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