In the modern era, traveling is regarded as a key factor contributing to the development of the culture and experiences of societies. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the necessity of putting a person in charge to make the general decisions for the crowd. Many people adhere to the view that the group’s affairs can be handled by each individual, while others think it is essential to have somebody who can choose what is good for the group and others obey him. I strongly believe that a group needs a leader. I presume this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, a tour leader knows the environment and has plenty of experience so he can provide us with a convenient travel plan. If we travel without somebody who knows what to do and where to go, we waste a lot of time to look for proper places to go. Also, we might miss some of the available places. My own experience is a compelling example of this. 4 years ago, I and my family traveled to Isfahan for the first time. Isfahan is a well-known city in Iran for its great historical monuments and artifacts; because it is an ancient town and also had been the capital of Iran for decades. Knowing these facts, we were so excited about our journey and we listed some places to visit. A year after our travel, I became acquainted with a person that was originally from Isfahan and told him about my trip to his hometown. Then, he named some extra places and asked me if we had visited them. Because they are known just by locals and tour guides, I had no clues of them and I felt so sad because of not visiting those places.
Second, a guide can design a plan to satisfy everybody and there will be no need for the group to separate into other smaller groups. The diversity of opinions and tastes of the people in a group makes it hard to keep everyone happy. Because some of them want shopping while others might prefer going to a museum and this attitude can cause arguments between them. For example, 10 years ago, I traveled to Mecca with my grandmother and my mother. I was not interested in religious stuff and desired to go to shops and malls to buy toys for myself. On the other hand, my grandmother and my mother wanted to be in the mosque all the time and didn’t pay attention to my pleas. As a result, we ended up fighting and shouting at each other and I didn’t talk to them until the end of our trip. Now that I’m thinking, if we had a leader, we could all our trip and make a good memory out of it.
In conclusion, I’m of the opinion that a tour leader is necessary for a group. I think this way because he knows all the places and can arrange a plan to visit everything, and he can satisfy the variety of desires of the people in the group.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...roper places to go. Also, we might miss some of the available places. My own experience is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, then, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34410646388 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45025764435 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505703422053 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3815388221 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.04 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100855781707 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329982398585 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311022170089 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.072882230057 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263727781905 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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