Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Games are one the most popular entertainment among children these days. even though, some people thinks that games make children lazy. I believe that, not event make them lazy, but improve their talents. I feel this way because of two reasons, which I explore it in the following.
First of all, It improves their social characteristics. While they want to play game, searching for other friends to play with them is one of the factor which help them to find more friend. As a result, they learn how to deal with others in life while contributing in a same time. For example, my cousin was very alone always since their parents bought computer and some computer games for him, he starts playing and also search to find friend to continue those games to gather so it encourages him to be more social rather than being alone with no communication with friend same age.
Secondly, computer games especially those which has finding solution contents help us to start be a good thinker and problem solving in whole our life, as a result they act cleverer than other children in same age. For instance, if you choose 2 children, one who play game daily and one who does his daily routine life and ask them a question with complexity, the one who is gamer can apply better solution and more impressive than other one.
To sum up, playing game has some advantages and disadvantages, but I think its advantages are more than disadvantages as I mentioned above. Parents also can be their good leader to select games which are more effective and reliable in their age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: help them find
...ay with them is one of the factor which help them to find more friend. As a result, they learn ho...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1287.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 274.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69708029197 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48946044111 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580291970803 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9248074669 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.25 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9166666667 5.45110844103 200% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279620834191 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946093976322 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662788332973 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163431689872 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044622743303 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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