do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Essay topics:

do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Last decade, famous people had very specific circumstances between people especially young adults. The young generation usually follows them in various ways. In my point of view, I believe that it is true that young adults care more about such big people compare to old people. In this essay, I am going to describe three main reasons to be proven.
First of all, the young generation always buys magazines and newspapers and watch movies to see those famous celebrities. But the old generation is not interested to buy magazines and use other media to follow up with them and get their opinions. As a result, nothing to see and nothing to follow. For example, a guy with age twenty always likes to be in good style and go somewhere that famous people use to go and use to buy their clothes, so she or he should buy those sources to get data where they go shopping and having fun. On the other hand old one never wants to be in style because he or she doesn’t need to be up to date for what they wear and what they buy.
Secondly, most of the time famous people are in a successful category which many people like to know the secret of their success, so young adults always like to listen to them and follow their life to see how they can be like them. As a result, always they follow their lifestyle, and food style. For instance, a famous artist on television with good shape and a good face has a specific story which she came from a poor family and finally, with hard-working she reaches to this point. This gives other common people especially young ones to believes that she can do, as the actress did.
Thirdly, famous people always are in good shape with kind of cloths wearing that young adults enjoy watching compare to the old generation. Because of the different points of view and lifestyle that they have. To make this point clear, some famous artists use to wear open clothes which are not sufficient for grandfathers or grandmothers to see and wear but their kids like to wear the same clothes because they follow their own idol.
To sum up always is good to know that day by day people view and the way of thinking will change and young generation always try to be up to date with their lovely idols which are famous such as athletes and follow their opinion, although old generation sometimes are following them most of the time it is difficult for them to bear this kind of thinking and opinions.

Votes
Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...ewspapers and watch movies to see those famous celebrities. But the old generation is not interest...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... see and nothing to follow. For example, a guy with age twenty always likes to be...
^^
Line 2, column 403, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...yle and go somewhere that famous people use to go and use to buy their clothes, so ...
^^^
Line 2, column 417, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ewhere that famous people use to go and use to buy their clothes, so she or he shou...
^^^
Line 4, column 256, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...e this point clear, some famous artists use to wear open clothes which are not suff...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49206349206 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30741195216 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451247165533 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.6408710997 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.529411765 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9411764706 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2941176471 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205091183388 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743186941227 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380616561019 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131081267794 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255870518539 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.