Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.

Children always like to be independent. Most of the government provide the facility for their young adult to leave separately. Although, some adult-like to be dependent on their parents. In my point of view, being independent is very effective for adults to have various experiences in their own life. I prefer to leave separately for a couple of reasons.
To begin with, If adults leave independent, they would care about themselves and learn how to do this fact. If they don’t have this experience in life, they never can grow and handle life. However, adults who leave with parents never can have such expertise. For example, my colleague is from another city and she leaves alone here in Tehran. In contradictory, She is a very manageable and stronger person.
Secondly, adults who leave alone learn how to earn money and always rely on themselves economically. They know how to save money, and don’t spend money on things you don’t need and also learn how to invest their money to make them twice. For instance, a guy who leaves alone knows he should pay the rent so that’s why he doesn’t spend money on having fun with friends. Indeed, he knows where to spend his money.
Thirdly, being separate provide them a free place to invite their friends and keep them for a long time without any disruption from parents. To make this point clear, when my sister invites her friends in our place. Despite this, we like them but is quite irritating us my our privacy. She is cool with because of their friends but it is difficult for family members.
To sum up, adults are trying to be individuals as soon as possible and it is their rights. But also their culture and the country they live in it should accept the fact and provide enough facility for them, otherwise, how they can handle all life cost financially. In addition, they should be aware of all danger which might be around and take care of themselves.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... their young adult to leave separately. Although, some adult-like to be dependent on the...
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Line 4, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... her friends in our place. Despite this, we like them but is quite irritating us ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, in addition, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71810089021 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48573668037 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545994065282 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8924536246 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7142857143 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0476190476 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272765596293 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846810229483 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846479783635 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147843764764 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846710242044 0.0645574589148 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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