10/10/2017
You recently saw an advertisement about helpers for children summer holiday camp. Write a letter to camp organizers and say:
– Describe the areas where you can help.
– Give the time period you are available.
– Ask some questions about the camp.
Dear Sir or Madame,
I have recently read an ad in a local newspaper that states help is needed in a summer holiday camp. I am a university student who pursues a master degree in psychology. Although my major field of interest is consultancy, I hope my person may be useful in your camp. For instance, I can work with the staff to help them to resolve their psychological issues and not to project those personal matters on children. Moreover, studying conflictology for two years could be useful as well. If there are any disputes or cases of violence among educators or progeny, I can help to solve them quickly and peacefully.
Unfortunately, I have to prepare to incoming examination but I will be available from first July to fifteenth August 2017. Five hours per weekday and two or three hours per weekend can be devoted to working in the camp. Ideally, I’d prefer to start my working day at 8:00 because my evenings are spent on preparation for the next semester.
I have some questions and hopefully, you don’t mind answering them. Primarily, how many children visit the camp every day and how many teachers and educators are employed. Furthermore, your prospect on the way how pupils should spend their leisure time is a very interesting question as well.
If my proposal is interesting for your institution, please contact me via e-mail.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
I have to prepare to incoming examination
I have to prepare an incoming examination
Sentence: Moreover, studying conflictology for two years could be useful as well.
Error: conflictology Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 240 250
No. of Characters: 1117 1200
No. of Different Words: 158 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.936 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.654 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.733 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 78 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.133 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.638 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1176.0 937.175257732 125% => OK
No of words: 237.0 206.0 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96202531646 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86135686978 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 127.690721649 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 369.0 290.88556701 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7069109222 44.8134815571 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9285714286 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 4.34317383033 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157692346804 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472036384987 0.0766984524023 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433256364417 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.081322645657 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496145876162 0.0580467560999 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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