29.10.2017You have lost your credit card.Write a letter to the manager of your bank. In the letterexplain how you lost the cardask the manger to cancel the old card and to issue you a replacement

Essay topics:

29.10.2017
You have lost your credit card.
Write a letter to the manager of your bank. In the letter
explain how you lost the card
ask the manger to cancel the old card and to issue you a replacement

Dear Sir or Madame,

I am writing to inform you about a loss of my credit card number4264 8890 9887 9001.

To begin with, I think I should describe the circumstances that led to the current situation. Yesterday, on 29th October 2017 I purchased a new laptop in a department store that is situated on the outskirts of the megalopolis. I paid for the computer by the card. When I arrived home, I realized I had forgotten the pieces of plastic in the mall. So, I phoned them immediately but my card was not found.

I decided to contact you to cancel my card because a possibility that the card can be used to steal my savings terrifies me. If sending an email is insufficient, I would like you to provide me with instructions how to do it correctly.

In addition, being an owner of your MASTER card was a pleasurable experience because it has been accepted in all countries I have ever visited. So, I want to order a new one. Is an email enough to issue a new card or I should do some additional actions such as visiting a bank office? Where and when can I get my novel card?

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely yours,

Eugene Dubinchuk

Votes
Average: 7.6 (3 votes)
Essay Categories
IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, i think, in addition, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 958.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 214.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47663551402 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77486692527 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635514018692 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2537532327 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.4285714286 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2857142857 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07142857143 4.34317383033 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247939333061 0.216113520407 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073208754427 0.0766984524023 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06126712659 0.0603063233224 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131236847023 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482650934262 0.0580467560999 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 8.37731958763 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.11 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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flaws:
try not to use 'I' always as the subject, look:

I paid for the computer by the card. When
I arrived home,
I realized
I had forgotten the pieces of plastic in the mall. So,
I phoned them immediately but my card was not found.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 214 250
No. of Characters: 906 1200
No. of Different Words: 136 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.825 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.234 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.698 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 58 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 44 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.729 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.718 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5