After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:• Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y

Essay topics:

After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.
Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:
• Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would you prefer? • Why do you think you are a good fit in that department?

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in regards to my keen interest for different department within the organization.

At the moment, my association with the finance department has been for more than 3 years. However, recently I completed my Post Graduation in human resource Management and I assume it will be a right time to alter my role and responsibility.

Undoubtedly, I will be interested to join the human resource team for the upcoming years of my service. Also, I will be always available to extend a hand to those who seek my advice in the finance team.

my current qualification has added a value to my skills which I would like to further use it for the advancement of our organization. Furthermore, my forte is into talent acquisition as well as payroll. Hence, my acquired knowledge will make me a better fit for human resource department.

I hope you grant to permission for this internal transfer. I will look forward to seeing your positive response.

Yours faithfully,
Jessica Ayri

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing in regards to my keen interest for different departme...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
... seek my advice in the finance team. my current qualification has added a value...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.85567010309 337% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 851.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03550295858 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10563526741 2.54303337028 122% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.656804733728 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9299229209 44.8134815571 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3636363636 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3636363636 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 4.34317383033 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127378093453 0.216113520407 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566299591048 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433126391151 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717094176479 0.12726935374 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373142252519 0.0580467560999 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 8.37731958763 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.36 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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