The bar chart below shows a survey of young professionals aged 20-30 who were asked which factors motivated to succeed

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows a survey of young professionals aged 20-30 who were asked which factors motivated to succeed

The chart shows a survey of 20-30 aged professionals that were asked to state which are their motivating factors to success.

Generally, the most motivating factors are both from internal and external influences. Meanwhile, negative factors like failure, envy, or feeling inadequate accounts for the least.

More than half of the attendants stated that personal satisfaction, ambition pressure from family and society are their factors motivating to success. In details, personal satisfaction and ambition account or about 80%, as well as the highest percentage shown on the chart. The other two also do not has much difference in proportions, around 60% and 70% respectively.

Both rivalry and desire for material things account for 50%, and followed by not-much-less percentages of peer pressure and money, at around 45% in both.

On the contrary, fear of failure, jealousy and feeling inadequate show humble percentages on the chart, which are also in the group that has the least proportions. They all account for under 40%, about 27%, 30% and 33% respectively.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 301, Rule ID: DONT_NEEDS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
...on the chart. The other two also do not has much difference in proportions, around ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well, while, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 32.9175257732 18% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 912.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 168.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42857142857 4.54256449028 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91613211817 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630952380952 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.13402061856 11% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6964771965 44.8134815571 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.333333333 76.5299724578 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 4.34317383033 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240075646825 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108792323783 0.0766984524023 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.178956321324 0.0603063233224 297% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171651842739 0.12726935374 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.220085905673 0.0580467560999 379% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 8.37731958763 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 8.71597938144 163% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.