The bar charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010

Essay topics:

The bar charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010.

the bar charts give the information on the different activities in the evening and the frequency of that one per month among various groups between 1980 and 2010.
It can be clearly see that over 50 aged group spent most of their time for visiting family and friends while the online at home covered the least activity that people enjoyed
Taking a closer look on the bar chart in 1980, the over 50 years group set aside for visiting family and friends for more than ten time a month which were more than other groups. At that moment, eating out was occupied at the second place. Moreover, eating out and visiting family and friends had the same patterns that people both lobed doing these activities.During that time, people from 26-50 years liked going to movies and shopping and they went there for more than two times and once per month respectively.
Turning to 2010, it showed a different trend, the online at home became the most attractive activity in the evening. In addition, visiting family and friends were not popular during the period of 20 years and people usually did not do it.

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Average: 7.9 (8 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, second, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 12.0 32.9175257732 36% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 905.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 193.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68911917098 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27105012324 2.54303337028 89% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585492227979 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 271.8 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 16.3608247423 196% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.21882236 44.8134815571 226% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 150.833333333 76.5299724578 197% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1666666667 16.8248392259 191% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 4.34317383033 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237281083188 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126220192573 0.0766984524023 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118181578787 0.0603063233224 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177092352935 0.12726935374 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111685468756 0.0580467560999 192% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 8.37731958763 199% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 70.7449484536 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 7.45979381443 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 8.54432989691 173% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 8.15463917526 221% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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