A charity organization you recently phoned regarding voluntary work with elderly people has asked you to support you application. Explain why your personality is suitableDescride ay practical skills you haveIndicate times and days you are avilable

Essay topics:

A charity organization you recently phoned regarding voluntary work with elderly people has asked you to support you application.

Explain why your personality is suitable
Descride ay practical skills you have
Indicate times and days you are avilable

Dear sir

I am writing this letter to enquire about the voluntary work done by your prominent organization. My name is Rajat and I am working as a senior executive manager in prestigious company "Elanta".

I am happy to advise you that I also want to do something for grey people. Helping others is a good trait and I always ready to be a part of this noble work. I have much potential to serve senior citizens. I can toil hard for long hours and surround your organization with my physicam strength as well as monetary help.

Recently, I did yoga course from reputed centre" Patanjali". Therefore, I nourish old people with some yoga poses like kapalbhati, pranayam, Anulomvilom which allows them to get rid from stress and physical weekness. I also have knowledge of teachnology such as computer and mobile apps. Having knoweldge of these plays a phenomenal role to utilize their lesser time in a constructive way.

My schedule is hectic but I can give my servicss at every weekend for technical skill. However, I can come their daily for yoga and exercise in early morning at 5.00am.

You are requested to give this opportunity because it will be a huge privilege for me to serve elderly people. Now, I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

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...menal role to utilize their lesser time in a constructive way. My schedule is hectic but I can gi...
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...ry weekend for technical skill. However, I can come their daily for yoga and exer...
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...ege for me to serve elderly people. Now, I look forward to hearing from you. ...
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...o hearing from you. Yours faithfully
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, look, so, therefore, well, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1084.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 220.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92727272727 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98597271552 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 127.690721649 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.686363636364 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3483965965 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4285714286 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7142857143 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 4.34317383033 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155111131184 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048476110567 0.0766984524023 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534005870054 0.0603063233224 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0821824157566 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687769241424 0.0580467560999 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 41.2886597938 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.