Compare the types of communication used in 1962 and in 1982 shows in the picture

Essay topics:

Compare the types of communication used in 1962 and in 1982 (shows in the picture).

The given pie charts illustrate the mode of communication used in 1962 and in 1982.The data is calibrated in percentum, which is clearly and coherently represented.

The data describes the use of three modes of communication, that is cell phones, computers and letters, which shows a remarkable change in the use of these modes.

As it can be observed from the graph, in 1962 half of the communication is done with the help of letters, which drastically fall by 40% in the year of 1982.Furthermore, the use of computers in 1962 was 15% only, that doubles in 1982. In the use of phones the figures was 35% only in 1962, which shooted up to more than half in 1982.

Overall, it can be said that, the use of cell phones raised to greater extent, and the letter system shows a dramatic fall.

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Average: 6.8 (7 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 32.9175257732 18% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 655.0 937.175257732 70% => OK
No of words: 142.0 206.0 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61267605634 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.45201032557 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85246042046 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 79.0 127.690721649 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556338028169 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 191.7 290.88556701 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 12.6804123711 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 16.3608247423 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7864608809 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0 76.5299724578 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 16.8248392259 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2 4.34317383033 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321239106405 0.216113520407 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172616685902 0.0766984524023 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509300757267 0.0603063233224 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179003506453 0.12726935374 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635745794077 0.0580467560999 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 8.37731958763 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 70.7449484536 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 8.62886597938 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 8.54432989691 154% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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