During a recent plane journey you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants

Dear John Harris,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing regarding the job vacancy which is available in one of your restaurants that is located in France.

To introduce my self, I am Hiva Farahani , I was sitting next to you in an airplane three days ago. Our flight number was 543and we were going from Spain to Dubai By Emirate Airlines.

In case you remember, you have offered me that you have a job vacancy for a head chef in your French restaurant. I am really interested in taking up this role as I have both academic and practical qualifications.

I think this job is a proper one for me as I have been working as a head chef for almost ten years. I am skilled and competent at preparing French cuisine since I have been making them for the first years of my professional life as a chef. Along with this, I have been working in several international restaurants such as KFC, Frenchy Ties and Mac Donald. I have been awarded three times as a qualified chef for three years in a row by the international association of chef which is located in Australia. I have also attached my CV. I would appreciate your time and consideration if you could take a glance at it.

For further inquiry, I am accessible via email at hivafara@gmail.com or through this phone number:98867

It would be your immense kindness if you consider my request.

I am eager to earn your affirmative feedback at your earliest convenience.

Respectfully yours,

Hiva Farahani

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 41, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...To introduce my self, I am Hiva Farahani , I was sitting next to you in an airplan...
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Line 9, column 101, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ng as a head chef for almost ten years. I am skilled and competent at preparing F...
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Line 9, column 534, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... Australia. I have also attached my CV. I would appreciate your time and consider...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, regarding, so, well, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 32.9175257732 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1224.0 937.175257732 131% => OK
No of words: 262.0 206.0 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67175572519 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94026265853 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572519083969 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 380.7 290.88556701 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9080759499 44.8134815571 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4666666667 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 4.34317383033 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132936746501 0.216113520407 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476754399603 0.0766984524023 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565578980872 0.0603063233224 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745604357698 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600481634302 0.0580467560999 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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