During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurant. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.Write a letter to this businessman, In your letter:1

Essay topics:

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurant. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman, In your letter:
1. remind him when ans where you met
2. tell him what kind of job you are interested in
say why you think you will be suitable for the job

Dear Mr. Joseph,

I am Harry martin, your co-passenger in a flight A456 from new york to Delhi on 26th june. I hope you are doing great in health and your business. I am writing this letter to talk about job opportunity you discussed with me in the plane.

As I mentioned you that day that I have recently moved to new york, due to my wife's new job site. I completed my degree in hotel-management from Mumbai University in 2010. Since then, I have worked in several renowned restaurants in various countries and gained remarkable experience as a Senior Relationship Manager. I had been working with hotel America inn from last five years but due to relocation, I resigned from there.

I believe that I would be really an aspiring candidate for your hotel and I would bring new heights of achievements from my past work experiences. I am comfortable working in shifting hours and have the caliber of dealing team of fifty people. I have enclosed my resume with this letter, please have a look. You could contact me on 401-401-4011 or e-mail me at harry@abc.com.

I hope to get a positive feedback from you soon.
Your sincerely,
Harry martin

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...oing great in health and your business. I am writing this letter to talk about jo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ity you discussed with me in the plane. As I mentioned you that day that I have ...
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Line 7, column 148, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...evements from my past work experiences. I am comfortable working in shifting hour...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...aliber of dealing team of fifty people. I have enclosed my resume with this lette...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, really, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 954.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 202.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72277227723 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88166441574 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628712871287 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0641580537 44.8134815571 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.3846153846 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5384615385 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38461538462 4.34317383033 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160721697909 0.216113520407 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636892250913 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744839161679 0.0603063233224 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110880680413 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658303931726 0.0580467560999 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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