During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contacthim about a possible job in one of his restaurants.Write a letter to this businessman. In your letterRe

Essay topics:

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact
him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
Remind him when and where you met
Tell him what kind of job you are interested in
Say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing with regards to my interest to work at your restaurant.

I hope you remember that we had met on flight EK 35 which was flying from Dubai to Toronto on 5th September. My seat was next to you and we also had a good conversation about your business. During our communication I precisely remember that you had mentioned about various job opportunities at your food chain.

Fortunately, I am seeking a job in accounting and finance department and I will be keen to explore the opportunity of an accountant at your restaurant. In addition to this, I have done my masters in Human Resource Management. Hence, I can extend my hand to human resource team as well.

Also, prior to this I was employed at Chipotle restaurant as Accounts and Administration Manager due to my profound knowledge and experience. I firmly believe that my skills and qualification will add an value to your restaurant.

I look forward to seeing your positive response.

Yours sincerely,
Jeshika Ayri

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...at my skills and qualification will add an value to your restaurant. I look fo...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, so, well, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 848.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 171.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95906432749 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10614958549 2.54303337028 122% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.643274853801 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.023637786 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0909090909 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5454545455 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141999404748 0.216113520407 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553384500419 0.0766984524023 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568598009808 0.0603063233224 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0637233521143 0.12726935374 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646241378939 0.0580467560999 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 8.37731958763 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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