During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
• remind him when and where you met – we met on AirAsia plane from Delhi to Mumbai.
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear Sir/Madam,
I hope this letter finds you in a good health and I am sure you remember about our recent meeting on the AirAsia plane on Friday. We both travelled together from the Delhi to Mumbai and I sat next to you during the journey. As you suggested me to contact you regarding the job vacancies in one of yours’ restaurants. Therefore, I am writing this letter to you for the suitable position for me.
Allow me to elaborate my professional and academic background. I am post graduate in business management with 10 years of experience in the same field. Thus, I would like to grab the opportunity in one of your restaurants for the position of General Manager. Currently, I am working with KFC outlet located on the downtown and I am willing to explore my skills in more challenging environment.
Furthermore, I reckon that I am most suitable applicant for this position as I fulfill all the requirements. Moreover, I am quite experience with handling fast food based restaurants. I am expert in handling the stressful situation which may occur during the working hours at the store. I have recently completed online digital marketing course for food industry from Oxford University.
I look forward to meeting you to discuss the possibility of employment.
Yours faithfully,
Deepack Sharma
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d I sat next to you during the journey. As you suggested me to contact you regardi...
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Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: YOURS_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: An apostrophe is never used to form possessive case pronouns. Did you mean: 'yours'?
Suggestion: yours
...u regarding the job vacancies in one of yours’ restaurants. Therefore, I am writing th...
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Line 7, column 131, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'experienced'.
Suggestion: experienced
... the requirements. Moreover, I am quite experience with handling fast food based restauran...
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Line 7, column 388, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r food industry from Oxford University. I look forward to meeting you to discuss...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... industry from Oxford University. I look forward to meeting you to discuss ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, look, may, moreover, regarding, therefore, thus, i reckon
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.48453608247 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 26.3917525773 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1102.0 937.175257732 118% => OK
No of words: 220.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00909090909 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9968164927 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604545454545 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.9335947255 44.8134815571 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.7142857143 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7142857143 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 4.34317383033 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257777337679 0.216113520407 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848502109307 0.0766984524023 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943926177824 0.0603063233224 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148480548145 0.12726935374 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148873376352 0.0580467560999 256% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 8.37731958763 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 8.71597938144 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.