You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable.Write a letter to the company that sold you the item. In the letter:• give details about the order you made – wrist watch for men, Fastrack , model, color price.• explain w

Essay topics:

You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable.

Write a letter to the company that sold you the item. In the letter:

• give details about the order you made – wrist watch for men, Fastrack , model, color price.

• explain what was wrong with the item - different color of strap, scratch on the dial, stopped workin.

• tell the company what you want them to do about it – refund / replace

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a frequent customer and hold a gold membership card from your company’s online store. I am writing this letter to express my disappointment with a recent purchase on your online store, order number #D7844. To specify, I ordered a Fastrack smart wrist watch for men. It was a black color watch and the model number is Fasttrack Reflex 2.0.

To begin with, yesterday, I received my order and I was quite excited. When I unboxed the item I noticed that the color of the strap is yellow instead of black. Moreover, it has some scratches on the dial of the watch. I was totally shocked and distress with the item I have purchased from your website.

This item was totally unusable. Therefore, I initiate a return of the item on your website. I would really appreciate if you could address this issue on immediate attention and refund the full amount of the purchase. I would like you to offer me a discount for my next purchase on your eCommerce website.

I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest.

Yours faithfully,

Deepak Sharma

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 72, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eived my order and I was quite excited. When I unboxed the item I noticed that the c...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rchase on your eCommerce website. I look forward to hearing from you at the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, really, so, therefore, as to, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 907.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77368421053 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64987847942 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594736842105 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7116989765 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.7692307692 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6153846154 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 4.34317383033 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302695497442 0.216113520407 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984493568515 0.0766984524023 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628023676931 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162241615803 0.12726935374 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500313500186 0.0580467560999 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 8.37731958763 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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