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The bar chart illustrates the difference in divisions of payment for five selected
categories among the US, Canada, the UK, and Japan, traced to its origin in 2012.

It is noticeable that the figures for food, housing and transportation were
remarkably higher than those for health care and clothing. Of the five expenses,
people spent the most money on accommodations.

Housing on an average became the highest disbursement and the US headed the list
with approximately 26%, followed by 24% and 22% of the UK and Japan residents.
Next came Canadians at the lowest percentage of slightly over 21% of total
expenditures. In terms of food, Japanese spenders, however, paid out around 23%
money and was the top-ranked nation. In the UK, people spent one-fifth of the total
amount while it was less than 15% in the US and Canada. The figures of the US and
Canada purchases spending on transportation were higher than those for the
others, with around 17% and 20%, respectively.

A closer look at the data reveals that the British occupied the smallest health care
sector of merely 1%, while the biggest percentage of that belonged to Americans.
Interestingly, all the four nations invested similarly around 5% on clothing, which
were marginally higher than those on medicaments.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, similarly, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 32.9175257732 39% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1100.0 937.175257732 117% => OK
No of words: 211.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21327014218 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92947739101 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592417061611 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.13402061856 11% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.5981594572 44.8134815571 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 76.5299724578 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 4.34317383033 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 4.29896907216 395% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.216113520407 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0766984524023 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.12726935374 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0580467560999 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 8.37731958763 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 8.71597938144 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 7.59969072165 123% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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