A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter to feedback regarding your company’s decisions on sponsoring the children’s sport team for two years or the two open-air concerts. In this letter, I will present benefits on each activities and my opinions.
First of all, sponsoring children’s sport team is supporting the children to continue the sport that they interest. By participating in a sport team, children can gain the team working ability and physical goodness which are important their life. On the other hand, many people will surely interest on the open concerts and it is a good chance to build up your company’s reputation in this region.
In terms of our society, I would recommend to invest your good money on the children’s sport team because not only this will help the children but also the company can still build the reputation during the two years sponsored period. In long term, community will recognise your good effort on the children and it will, in turn, benefits your business.
Thanks for your attention into this matter and I hope that you would consider my explanation.
Best Regards,
Mr. Yan Naung Aye
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 34, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend investing'.
Suggestion: recommend investing
...on. In terms of our society, I would recommend to invest your good money on the children's ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, still, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 983.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17368421053 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94562448406 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605263157895 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.1517365235 44.8134815571 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.222222222 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 4.34317383033 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290677135849 0.216113520407 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116571870352 0.0766984524023 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111818022007 0.0603063233224 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188764234373 0.12726935374 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0963988614931 0.0580467560999 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 8.37731958763 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 8.71597938144 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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