A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money,either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the comp

Essay topics:

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money,
either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts.
It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir,
I am Satpreet Singh resident of Yamuna nagar city. I am writing this letter to give my views about the option that your company has given to the local citizens regarding the funds you are going to spent for the welfare of local residents.
As, mentioned by your company there are two plans,first is to sponsor a local children's sports team, because it will not only encurage the youth towards the sports also it will give them a stage to rise and show their hidden talent.
And as per second option which is related to a open-air concerts, also has many plus points.It will be great step to entertainment the local public. Since our town is small and so far not a single event has been taken place because of the reason this open-air concert will be the new experience for us and I am sure youth will enjoy is most because it will be going to happen in our city first time.
I would personaly stand with the first option which is to sponsor local children's sports team because this will motivate childrens ,moreover local children's sports team are not getting any funds for the government so giving them platform will give positive impact to our society.

Your Faithfully,
Satpreet Singh

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 198, Rule ID: GOING_TO_VBD[1]
Message: 'Going to' requires the base form: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
...ns regarding the funds you are going to spent for the welfare of local residents. As...
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Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , first
...oned by your company there are two plans,first is to sponsor a local childrens sports ...
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Line 4, column 46, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s per second option which is related to a open-air concerts, also has many plus p...
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Line 4, column 57, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'concert'?
Suggestion: concert
...d option which is related to a open-air concerts, also has many plus points.It will be g...
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Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...air concerts, also has many plus points.It will be great step to entertainment the...
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Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...eam because this will motivate childrens ,moreover local childrens sports team are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, moreover, regarding, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 994.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 214.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64485981308 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30009094976 2.54303337028 90% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565420560748 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 16.3608247423 183% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.6868267862 44.8134815571 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 76.5299724578 186% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5714285714 16.8248392259 182% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 4.34317383033 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219216475207 0.216113520407 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968285894073 0.0766984524023 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608850921944 0.0603063233224 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138046809107 0.12726935374 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297111186947 0.0580467560999 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 8.37731958763 187% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 70.7449484536 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 7.45979381443 169% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 8.62886597938 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 8.54432989691 164% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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