A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to t

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear sir or Madam
I am writing you in response of feedback asked by your company regarding decision of spending money for social cause by sponsoring a local children sport team or funding for two open air concert.
I would like to mention some advantages of sponsoring local children sport team. As, nowadays, football is becoming more and more popular in our areas, therefore, some teams are built already and they are going to participate in state level championship. But due to scarcity of money they are unable to do so. So, it will be great contribution if you could sponsor them.
Your second option has also significant benefit to society at large. Funding to open air concerts will stimulate interest in music among people and also it can generate employment to local individuals.
Apart from this your company would also be benefitted by doing advertisement and promotional activities during the match or show.
I would personally suggest to spend money on sports because of two reasons, firstly it contributes to motivate people about exercise and physical health and secondly athletes would get name and fame in particular sport and eventually Britten the name of our country.
Yours sincerely
John Smith

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 140, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'child'?
Suggestion: child
... for social cause by sponsoring a local children sport team or funding for two open air ...
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Line 6, column 20, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest spending'.
Suggestion: suggest spending
... the match or show. I would personally suggest to spend money on sports because of two reasons,...
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Line 6, column 84, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n sports because of two reasons, firstly it contributes to motivate people about ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1026.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 201.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10447761194 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71798471389 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.676616915423 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.7471355376 44.8134815571 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 4.34317383033 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283481423633 0.216113520407 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933674028001 0.0766984524023 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11685244181 0.0603063233224 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152866230601 0.12726935374 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153093783591 0.0580467560999 264% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 8.37731958763 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 8.71597938144 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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