A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Essay topics:

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Dear sir or madam,

I would like to appreciate the valuable step that your organization has taken for the betterment of our society. sponsoring the juvenile's sports team for two years of organizing an open-air concert can be beneficial for my community.

undoubtedly, sponsorship of funds for two years to the junior sports team can be fruitful as they can get better training equipment and trainers. moreover, these funds aid the local guys to perform on the national and international platforms and also, promote your brand to the next level. Providing money not only better their training but also improve their physical fitness and get them motivated.

on the other side of the coin, it is appreciable together people on to a single spot via open-air concert as people are going through a hectic scheduled life. it is a nice way to give them some fun and frolic time to remember for long with the help of such community events.

according to my perception, both the ways in which you have decided to fund have their own significance to make community people come together. however, spending money to sponsor a junior sports team would be grateful than arranging the events.

yours faithfully.

ramneek

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Sponsoring
...aken for the betterment of our society. sponsoring the juveniles sports team for two years...
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Suggestion: Undoubtedly
...an be beneficial for my community. undoubtedly, sponsorship of funds for two years to ...
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Suggestion: Moreover
...better training equipment and trainers. moreover, these funds aid the local guys to perf...
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Suggestion: On
...al fitness and get them motivated. on the other side of the coin, it is appre...
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... going through a hectic scheduled life. it is a nice way to give them some fun and...
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Suggestion: According
...the help of such community events. according to my perception, both the ways in whic...
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Suggestion: However
...to make community people come together. however, spending money to sponsor a junior spo...
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Suggestion: Yours
...rateful than arranging the events. yours faithfully. ramneek
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Suggestion: Ramneek
...ng the events. yours faithfully. ramneek
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1030.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 203.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07389162562 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70413288952 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655172413793 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 307.8 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0789968355 44.8134815571 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.444444444 76.5299724578 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 16.8248392259 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253332376647 0.216113520407 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947575192385 0.0766984524023 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0958503468518 0.0603063233224 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147123777034 0.12726935374 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.099175423217 0.0580467560999 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 8.37731958763 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 8.71597938144 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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