A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company.
In your letter:
• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money
Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to express my gratification for the decision made by your company to spend a decent amount of money towards the benefit of the society. I appreciate your willingness to sponsor either a local children sport for two years or alternatively to pay for local air concerts.
No doubt, financial support to the local children sports team for two years will benefit both the players and your company. Children will get the opportunity to learn and get trained by the professionals as well as it will promote your company image. Few children might get professional athlete and bring fame to the country.
On the other hand, the amount to be paid by your company for two open air concerts is a good idea. People will be entertained with the performances and some of the local bands will get the opportunity to show their talent.
I firmly believe that sponsoring the local children sports will be more advantageous than paying for two open air concerts for the community. As in the former younger generations will get the chance to become trained athletes and will bring honour to the country but the latter will just happen for few hours for entertainment purpose and people will forget about it.
I would like to thank you for your generous initiative
Yours Sincerely
Prabhpreet Kaur
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'or'.
Suggestion: or
...er a local children sport for two years or alternatively to pay for local air concerts. No do...
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Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...e entertained with the performances and some of the local bands will get the opportunity to...
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Line 11, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o thank you for your generous initiative Yours Sincerely Prabhpreet Kaur
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Line 13, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r generous initiative Yours Sincerely Prabhpreet Kaur
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Line 15, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve Yours Sincerely Prabhpreet Kaur
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, no doubt, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1113.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 228.0 206.0 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88157894737 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66852356286 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55701754386 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 331.2 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.7690076492 44.8134815571 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.3 76.5299724578 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 16.8248392259 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 4.34317383033 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382675818041 0.216113520407 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180065684954 0.0766984524023 235% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13963074954 0.0603063233224 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232720377179 0.12726935374 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11690056499 0.0580467560999 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 8.37731958763 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.