A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money either to sponsor a local children s sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts It has asked for feedback from the general public Write a letter to the company

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company.
In your letter,
• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir,
I am writing this epistle to appreciate the decision that you have taken and provide my feedback that how the funds can be allocated for these two purposes.
Firstly, I would like to share my viewpoint regarding sponsoring the juveniles' sports team. Spending money on children is not only advantageous for the students but also your company as they will get better training which ultimately leads to the promotion of your brand. Moreover, if a child wins a medal at the national or international level, it will be a proud moment for our country.
Secondly, arranging the concert is a great idea as it is a great source of entertainment/enjoymentin this pandemic situation as the people were bound inside the four walls of their homes. In addition to it, the local bands will get a chance to showcase their talents.
In my opinion, I assert that expenditure should be more on sports and instead of two concerts, one would be enough as concerts will give temporary refreshment. However, the provision for young sportsmen will be fruitful in the future as well.
I am grateful to you for such a commendable initiative.
Yours sincerely, 3rd December,2020
Lisa

Votes
Average: 9.5 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ommendable initiative. Yours sincerely, 3rd December,2020 Lisa
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: COMMA_MONTH_DATE[1]
Message: The comma is probably incorrect: 'December 2020'.
Suggestion: December 2020
... 3rd December,2020 Lisa
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Line 8, column 5, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... 3rd December,2020 Lisa
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 985.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 198.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97474747475 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12418543613 2.54303337028 123% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.671717171717 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1996681404 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 4.34317383033 265% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234039978809 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790813722787 0.0766984524023 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515757405043 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100536827196 0.12726935374 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611081250428 0.0580467560999 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 8.37731958763 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 8.71597938144 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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