A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money either to sponsor a local children s sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts It has asked for feedback from the general public Write a letter to the com

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my concern regarding to the public investment to our community. I propse that you should spend the money on the Red Eagle team instead of the concerts. I will explain my idea as below.

First, there are some benefits from holding rock and roll concerts for two days. Due to the poor location and transportation, our community is less famous in our country, even in our province. While by holding concerts of rock music, more and more people especially the youth will get to know our city. The concerts would improve the local traveling and hoteling business. Our residents will get lots of fun in the concert. Moreover, our company will be more famous to the world with this sponsorship.

Second, the red eagle team as the champion team of our province in primary school basktball league, is well-know in our city. Many of the palyers' parents are proud of their children. This year is an important chance for them as they are fighting for the national league champion. Besides, I knew they are encoutering the financial difficulty as the primary school could not get enough sponsors.

I suggest the invesement should be taken to the children's team, if they win at last, our company will be also on the TV as the main sponsor. Also, both the primary school and the parents will show great gratitude to you.

Thank you for reading my letter, I am wating tfor you reply.

Sincerely,
Tony

Votes
Average: 7.5 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...Red Eagle team instead of the concerts. I will explain my idea as below. First...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1199.0 937.175257732 128% => OK
No of words: 252.0 206.0 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75793650794 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49250261524 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587301587302 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 349.2 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5295713218 44.8134815571 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9375 76.5299724578 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 4.34317383033 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169413157798 0.216113520407 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519254031631 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574547684988 0.0603063233224 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.089825601687 0.12726935374 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195144615768 0.0580467560999 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 41.2886597938 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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