"Most cultures encourage individuals to sacrifice a large part of their own personalities in order to be like other people. Thus, most people are afraid to think or behave differently because they do not want to be exclude
Culture is the image of music, arts, traditions and rituals of a society. The author claims 2 points. First one is, most cultures influence individuals to sacrifice a large part of their own personality for being like other people. Second one is the most people are afraid to think out of the box because they don’t want to be ostracized. I agree with the later claim. But I take exception with the former one.
Every person is surrounded by the culture of the society he/she lives in. Every culture of a country/society introduces its people with the social behavior, customs, rituals, arts the country/society possesses. There might be a good chance of people being influenced by the culture of their society. But, in this 21st century’s democratic world, there number of fascist countries that influences individuals to sacrifice their own individuality is very limited. Every democratic country provides its citizen the liberty to share their thought and shape their personalities. Therefore, every individual has an independent choice to shape up his personality in a democratic country. Let’s shed more light to it by giving an example of a democratic country: Bangladesh. This country has a rich and diverse culture in music, art, rituals and customs. And according to the constitution of Bangladesh, every person is independent to make and shape up their choices.
By nature every human being prefer living within a society than being excluded. Therefore, in spite of holding individual liberty, most people actually stay constrained within the four walls of the culture they are surrounded by. Because, most people are afraid that they might get ostracized if they shape their individualities and opinions differently than the accepted standards.
But still, there are very few outliers who dare taking stand to shape up their own thinking and personality the way they want. But this number is very limited and exceptional. And “Exception can’t be an example”.
In summary, Culture doesn’t force to limit the perception of the idea, individuality a person holds. Individuals who are afraid to behave differently encourage themselves to do so at their own peril.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 35, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'limiting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: limiting
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, second, so, still, therefore, in summary, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.48453608247 254% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 5.05154639175 257% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 26.3917525773 178% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 937.175257732 196% => OK
No of words: 350.0 206.0 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 3.78020617076 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99249264743 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 127.690721649 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525714285714 0.622605031667 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 290.88556701 200% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.463917525773 1078% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 12.6804123711 181% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4228783453 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0434782609 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2173913043 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4347826087 4.34317383033 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.94845360825 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448239699298 0.216113520407 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111991617463 0.0766984524023 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114121190941 0.0603063233224 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251480607221 0.12726935374 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090328727169 0.0580467560999 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 70.7449484536 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 8.71597938144 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 41.2886597938 196% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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