My LetterYou are relocating to a new city. write a letter to an agent to arrange a house for you and your family.When and why are you relocating.what kind of house do you want?

Essay topics:

My Letter
You are relocating to a new city. write a letter to an agent to arrange a house for you and your family.
When and why are you relocating.
what kind of house do you want?

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing with regard to renting a house / apartment in toronto, canada. me and my family is moving to canada to live there.

Let me explain it further, I have booked seats for us on 23rd of October of PIA from Islamabad airport to toronto airport. we are going to land there at 3pm. To find new prospect of employment and better education of my children, i decided to get immigration of canada. which i have been awarded after fulfilling all basis requirements.

we are family of six person, me, my wife and four kinds. we need a spacious house as rent would not be a problem for me. As per requirement, it should have garage for 2 cars, three bedrooms and spacious kitchen.

I am looking forward to your response, if you need any further information feel free to contact me on my mobile (0092-222-22222)

Yours faithfully,

SAIRA

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing with regard to renting a ho...
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Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Me
...a house / apartment in toronto, canada. me and my family is moving to canada to li...
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Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...m Islamabad airport to toronto airport. we are going to land there at 3pm. To find...
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Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...nt and better education of my children, i decided to get immigration of canada. w...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...i decided to get immigration of canada. which i have been awarded after fulfilling al...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...r fulfilling all basis requirements. we are family of six person, me, my wife a...
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Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...s requirements. we are family of six person, me, my wife and four kinds. we need a ...
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Line 7, column 58, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...six person, me, my wife and four kinds. we need a spacious house as rent would not...
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Line 7, column 157, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'garaged'.
Suggestion: garaged
... me. As per requirement, it should have garage for 2 cars, three bedrooms and spacious...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ntact me on my mobile 0092-222-22222 Yours faithfully, SAIRA ...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...2 Yours faithfully, SAIRA
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 723.0 937.175257732 77% => OK
No of words: 152.0 206.0 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75657894737 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78207280406 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.723684210526 0.622605031667 116% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 290.88556701 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0405183549 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 4.34317383033 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141404881615 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467722266411 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393663207049 0.0603063233224 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0810516289583 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271490664813 0.0580467560999 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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