now you do voluntary work for local community, but you are unable to continue doing this job. write your manager of this location

Essay topics:

now you do voluntary work for local community, but you are unable to continue doing this job. write your manager of this location

dear Madam,
My name is Tien and I am 19 years old. I have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. I am writing to present about the issues involved in my work.
Currently, I am fulfilling voluntary work, extraordinary teaching children in remote regions. Every day, I go to work by bus due to bad quality road. the main job is teaching english for industrious children in order to expand their knowledge. I am excited because of this significant job.
Unfortunately, the rate of homework is purely impressive so I could not continue doing this work. Although I always try to spend time teaching children but I find it difficult to commute. Therefore, I desired that I could come back in the near future when I end this homework.
In the other hand, I want to introduce my friend because I believe in her likelihood, her name is Hoa. Hoa used to participate in voluntary work, she is definitely stormy and enthusiasm. In particular, she really like children so I assume she would like to this job
I would be grateful if you would accept for interrupting. I am looking forward to receiving your response.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Dear
dear Madam, My name is Tien and I am 19 y...
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dear Madam, My name is Tien and I am 19 years old. I...
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...to work by bus due to bad quality road. the main job is teaching english for indust...
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...n so I assume she would like to this job I would be grateful if you would accept ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, really, so, therefore, thus, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 932.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 199.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68341708543 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89360853944 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618090452261 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.0106099935 44.8134815571 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.5714285714 76.5299724578 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2142857143 16.8248392259 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07142857143 4.34317383033 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295403405325 0.216113520407 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871613058978 0.0766984524023 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828163666565 0.0603063233224 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137416046061 0.12726935374 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393213058138 0.0580467560999 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 8.37731958763 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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