New parents should attend parenting courses to ensure the growth of their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

New parents should attend parenting courses to ensure the growth of their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is widely argued that people who recently welcomed baby should participate in courses to make sure about children developing. Personally, I strongly agree with this view.
In my opinion, it is definitely essential for new parents to learn parenting courses based on two major reasons: health and mental. Firstly, in term of child health, the majority of new parents wonder how to provide full of nutrients for children. Thus, parenting courses would guide them about necessary knowledge related to the growth of their children. For example, newborns are always lack of substances, especially vitamins while parents do not know more about it. From this problem, this course would provide knowledge about balance among substances in baby’s body. Secondly, new parents also take care of children about mental aspect due to its importance. As far as I know, children often sensitive in developing process, hence parent should back up as well as guide them the right way. Actually, the number of them becomes run wild, even leading to commit crime because of over-protection. In addition, children are purely need to pay attention from their parents to share about what they have to face up. Therefore, every new parent should learn parenting course to understand more about children thinking. According to the report in Vietnam, depressed children account for approximately 200 people per year, the main reason is that they are not enough care.
In conclusion, I assume that new parents should attend to parenting courses to get to know more about health as well as mental.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 68, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to parent'.
Suggestion: to parent
...tely essential for new parents to learn parenting courses based on two major reasons: hea...
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Line 2, column 937, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
...ction. In addition, children are purely need to pay attention from their parents to ...
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Line 2, column 1061, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to parent'.
Suggestion: to parent
...herefore, every new parent should learn parenting course to understand more about childre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, hence, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1796875 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64704286658 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6015625 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.9514815698 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.7142857143 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2142857143 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392807150415 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143055443514 0.084324248473 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969358993817 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254724536928 0.151304729494 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100213637252 0.056905535591 176% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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