Being a celebrity-such as a famous film star or sports personality-brings
problem as well as benefits.Do you think being celebrity brings more benefits or
more problems?
Nowadays,people intend to participate in entertainment because of the fact
that it brings them many glamorous things.In my opinion,being a celebrity is greatly
about fame and fortune but it still have problems
As far as I know,being a celebrity is purely attractive for people due to
reputation.they will be well-known by people coming from over the world and then
they have a big fan.Let me imagine about the future if I were a famous film star,I will
receive suggestion from actor and I may have opportunities of joining in foreign
films.Besides that,they will be paid attention and helped more from fans thus
everything is developing.For instance,Justin Bieber is known as a famous singer
attracting teenagers about songs so he always receives sentimental and gift from
fans.Moreover,being a celebrity will generate a large of money.In these
event,manager ready to pay a lot of money for singer in order to attract to
audience.For example,If you are a worker in office,you will be paid 50VNĐ per
hour,by contrast,singer will be paid 20 times more than them.As you can see,being a
celebrity brings people advantages
In the other hand,besides benefits which comes from occupation,there are many problems
about this job as well.Due to attention densely,they always focus on appearance and
even not showing their feeling for public.For instance,before going out,celebrities
have to make up so as to people do not recognize them.Another problem result in
this job is pressure when you have an anti fan.Another example proved about this
job:a singer called Selena had the time meet a psychologist in order to cure depression cause
in fans.
In conclusion,being a celebrity has pros and cons simultaneously hence people
should consider careful before joining in companies which involves in entertainment
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47719298246 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.51217378949 2.80592935109 125% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628070175439 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 16.0721442886 12% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 142.0 20.2975951904 700% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 748.5 49.4020404114 1515% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 780.5 106.682146367 732% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 142.5 20.7667163134 686% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 65.5 7.06120827912 928% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 37.0 5.01903807615 737% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21994474031 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135396741996 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818125161503 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0592283903398 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048106490402 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 75.6 13.0946893788 577% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -81.11 50.2224549098 -162% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 59.8 11.3001002004 529% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.69 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 15.06 8.58950901804 175% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 9.78957915832 613% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 58.8 10.1190380762 581% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 60.0 10.7795591182 557% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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