Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some people believe that opening of more and more arenas and stadiums would be the most effective methodology of improvising the public health. While others argue that other methods to be more efficient as this will have minimal effect on reducing the health problems. Despite the fact that sport facilities would motivate people to exercise, I believe that other practice such as increasing the taxes on the fast food manufactures to be more realistic.
On one hand, increasing the count of athletic fields and parks will encourage men and women towards taking part in various activities. These sports such as football and basketball will lead to vigorous physical exercise that would contribute towards healthy lifestyle. For example, in Germany government opened more domes and playground in schools that resulted in reducing the obesity among minors by 23%. However, I believe that other ways should be adopted as this will not do much towards the betterment of health of nation as whole.
On other hand, it is thought that other measures like rising the taxation on junk food companies would be more better. This will increase the cost of junk food and consequently, will reduce the demand of it. This will address the most prevailing issue of obesity which is like a tree and branching to many other diseases. For example, in United Kingdom when the hamburger cost was increased to $10 it resulted in reduction of sales by 5%. I believe this strategy to be much more effective because it focus more on cause of degradation of people's health and to be more realistic in real times owing to busy schedule prevailing these days.
In conclusion, although fields and arenas will motivate people to do physical workout, they will also find it difficult to find time for this in real world and therefore, other system of increased taxation of junk manufactures would be more result oriented for ameliorating public health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 4.92783505155 304% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.03092783505 330% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 26.3917525773 171% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 937.175257732 173% => OK
No of words: 320.0 206.0 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.053125 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 3.78020617076 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60226576455 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 127.690721649 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509375 0.622605031667 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 290.88556701 173% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.3910851262 44.8134815571 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.384615385 76.5299724578 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 16.8248392259 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 4.34317383033 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219555431837 0.216113520407 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879795587797 0.0766984524023 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568835612665 0.0603063233224 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151104067466 0.12726935374 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459413430515 0.0580467560999 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 8.37731958763 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 70.7449484536 67% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 7.45979381443 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 8.71597938144 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 41.2886597938 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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