There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter:Describe what the problem with the changing rooms i

Essay topics:

There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success.

Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter:

Describe what the problem with the changing rooms is
Say what happened the last times you complained
Explain what you want the manager to do

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to complain about poor quality of change room at the sports center.

I am a privilege member of STC sports center since its inception. me and my daughter akira visit the center daily, as she is training for national swimming championship to be held next month.The center provides best amenities for budding sportsman and this is the reason, I recommended my daughter to train here.

From last few weeks, the changing room next to the pool is in pathetic condition. The doors are malfunctioning, and the room has a peculiar bad smell all the time. Due to this kid’s are forced to enter the pool without taken shower, thus making the pool water dirty. Moreover, I am afraid to let me daughter use dirty pool, as she might fall sick. I have complained last week to one of your staff stationed next to the pool, however no actions have been taken yet.

I would request you to intervene and take necessary actions to resolve this issue at the earliest.

Your prompt response will help akira continue her practice for championship.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Mahesh

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mahesh
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, look, moreover, so, thus, i am afraid

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 968.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 196.0 206.0 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9387755102 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58350742607 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658163265306 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1387073819 44.8134815571 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6666666667 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 4.34317383033 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174304775403 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641164764052 0.0766984524023 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620517786861 0.0603063233224 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884584747128 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806865468398 0.0580467560999 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 8.37731958763 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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