ur friend has just moved to a new house you want to send him a gift Write a letter to your friend In your letter you should tell what you will send to him as gift why you chose it as gift how you will send it to him

Essay topics:

ur friend has just moved to a new house, you want to send him a gift. Write a letter to your friend.

In your letter, you should tell:
what you will send to him as gift
why you chose it as gift
how you will send it to him

Dear James,
How are you ? Hope everything going well in your life. I am writing to you to courier a parcel to your residential address for your new success in your life.

Initially,I was deliriously happy to know that you have finally purchased your dream house.There is no doubt, that your hardwork and dedication towards your work has put you on the top of a ladder. Apart from this, you have also organised a welcome party in your lovely house which unfortunately, I am unable to attend due to my official meeting scheduled on the same day
Secondly, I have decided to parcel you a huge art piece to you for your achievement. Besides this, the art piece I have choosed for you is handpicked by me. As, when I was on the travel to a meeting in china. Additionally, I went to china town market and there I saw this magnificent art piece of white horses.
It is really a mammoth and an unique piece. I just feel to keep it in my house but as you know I am still surviving in rented apartment. So, I thought it will best fit in your house.
At the end of the day, you will astonished to know that the seller of this masterpiece told me some exciting benefits of this piece. Indeed, it keeps the negativity of house far away as well as rising horses inclined to mean more success and happiness in life.
Lastly, I have made this shipments delivery directly into your residential address. Soon in couple of days you have to be ready to sign for a courier delivery as a valuable present from your dearest friend.
Furthermore, I have attached the tracking slip with this letter to track it's location.
Do write to me also as well as your reaction towards this item.
Best regards,
Yasmin.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...r new success in your life. Initially,I was deliriously happy to know that you ...
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...have finally purchased your dream house.There is no doubt, that your hardwork and ded...
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...art from this, you have also organised a welcome party in your lovely house whic...
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...this, you have also organised a welcome party in your lovely house which unfortu...
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...r lovely house which unfortunately, I am unable to attend due to my official meet...
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...e decided to parcel you a huge art piece to you for your achievement. Besides thi...
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Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ve choosed for you is handpicked by me. As, when I was on the travel to a meeting ...
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Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... saw this magnificent art piece of white horses. It is really a mammoth and an ...
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Line 6, column 28, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
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...te horses. It is really a mammoth and an unique piece. I just feel to keep it i...
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... horses. It is really a mammoth and an unique piece. I just feel to keep it in ...
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Line 7, column 33, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'astonish'
Suggestion: astonish
...house. At the end of the day, you will astonished to know that the seller of this masterp...
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Line 7, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... house far away as well as rising horses inclined to mean more success and happin...
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Line 8, column 26, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shipments'' or 'shipment's'?
Suggestion: shipments'; shipment's
...ess in life. Lastly, I have made this shipments delivery directly into your residential...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, furthermore, if, lastly, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, apart from, no doubt, you know, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 32.9175257732 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 26.3917525773 163% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 937.175257732 148% => OK
No of words: 310.0 206.0 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47741935484 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 3.78020617076 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5775068833 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 127.690721649 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554838709677 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.0 290.88556701 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5378549567 44.8134815571 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.1111111111 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 4.34317383033 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.29896907216 186% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 2.54639175258 511% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 7.41237113402 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287100862012 0.216113520407 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894648006449 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078162024631 0.0603063233224 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133913845089 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702021139716 0.0580467560999 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 8.37731958763 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 8.71597938144 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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