Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say Describe the problem How it is affecting your work What needs to be done about it

Dear manager,
I am writing to intimate you with the prevalent problem with my officially assigned computer system.
It all began 2 weeks ago when I was scheduled to make a presentation to my divisions management on an ongoing project for which you made me the team lead.

Normally, the system is expected to last for up to 3 hours before the battery would require a recharge. This is why I did not go in to the meeting room with my charger. To my disappointment, I had barely commenced my presentation when the computer suddenly switched of. I am grateful to Luois BARNNE who came to my rescue by letting me use his charger for the rest of the time of my presentation.

Prior to discovering the issue with the battery, I also observed that the Microsoft office applications hardly opens for more than one hour each time before it closes by itself. I am used to ensuring that my work is saved every 5 minutes to allow recovery in case of an abrupt shutdown.
The worst problem I have encountered with the computer is the bad keyboard. I have had to relabel the characters to align with what appears on the screen when a pad is depressed.

I would like to propose the following as possible remedial options: A re installation of the Microsoft office suite is necessary to address the incessant crash of the application, a request will be forwarded to you for approval to replace the faulty battery with a new one. Also I would propose a comprehensive health check, cleaning of the system in order to troubleshoot the issue with the malfunctioning keyboard.

With the problems I have reported so far, it may be better to consider an outright replacement since it is still within its warranty period.

Thanking you for your anticipated understanding and favorable consideration.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... hours before the battery would require a recharge. This is why I did not go in to the mee...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 267, Rule ID: TURNED_OFF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'off'?
Suggestion: off
...ion when the computer suddenly switched of. I am grateful to Luois BARNNE who came...
^^
Line 10, column 275, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...lace the faulty battery with a new one. Also I would propose a comprehensive health ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, may, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 26.3917525773 186% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 937.175257732 158% => OK
No of words: 311.0 206.0 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76848874598 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 3.78020617076 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98502100315 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 127.690721649 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585209003215 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 473.4 290.88556701 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.137918756 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.928571429 76.5299724578 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2142857143 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.42857142857 4.34317383033 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.29896907216 186% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15095835059 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578319715865 0.0766984524023 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601459238879 0.0603063233224 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0821456914885 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570254466 0.0580467560999 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 8.37731958763 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 41.2886597938 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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