Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say Describe the problem How it is affecting your work What needs to be done about it

Dear Mr. Garrison,

This is to inform you that I am facing some problem with my computer, these days. It takes too long to get booted, as such, I have to wait for several minutes before commencing my work. Moreover, it shuts down itself after some some, due to which I have to login again, thereafter, it repeats the lengthy process or re-booting.

Owing to his technical fault, my productivity is being affected badly, as I am not able to accomplish my tasks within the stipulated timeframe. Sometimes I have a generate some report which is urgently required by the team members, but I am not able to do so. I am afraid if not urgently rectified, this computer glitch can adversely affect my forthcoming promotion.

I would request you to kindly get it inspected by our technical team and in the meantime, kindly replace my system with another computer which is lying unused, in our store.

Yours Sincerely,
Navpreet Kaur

Votes
Average: 8.4 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: some
...k. Moreover, it shuts down itself after some some, due to which I have to login again, th...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ooting. Owing to his technical fault, my productivity is being affected badly,...
^^
Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... stipulated timeframe. Sometimes I have a generate some report which is urgently required ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, i am afraid

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 776.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 161.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8198757764 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70642151384 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664596273292 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.2173431023 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 16.8248392259 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 4.34317383033 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124772451788 0.216113520407 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549861808992 0.0766984524023 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.02517405778 0.0603063233224 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0686051135319 0.12726935374 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0108877401162 0.0580467560999 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 8.37731958763 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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