Write a letter to your manager about your work from the last year Include What you did What you think you could improve A training request

Dear Sir,
My name is Kelly Gardner, working in the IVF department as a Junior Embryologist. I am writing this letter to draw your attention toward the type of job role i did last year. I have few inputs to share related to my work, which i will mention them below.

According to my job description I performed all the following work routines:
- Oocyte scanning and Denudation
-Performing ICSI
-Embryo transfer
- Embryo thawing and freezing

As you know we have been working as per our SOP's, there are few things that i would like you to install as a part of our lab equipment that will help us to achieve good results. First is a Laser machine, which will help our patients to have better chances for having pregnancy. Second thing is an additional liquid nitrogen storage tank to accommodate enough patient samples.

Apart from the above mentioned points, I have a request to make, there is going to be a hands on training for embryo biopsy next month at Mayflower Hospital, i would like to attend that to improve my skills on the same.

I hope I justify the roles for last year, and looking forward to hear your suggestion about the training request at the earliest.

Thank you

Your's Faithfully
Kelly Gardner

Votes
Average: 8.7 (4 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...r attention toward the type of job role i did last year. I have few inputs to sha...
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Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...puts to share related to my work, which i will mention them below. According t...
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Line 10, column 77, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...per our SOPs, there are few things that i would like you to install as a part of ...
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Line 12, column 87, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a hand' or simply 'hands'?
Suggestion: a hand; hands
...a request to make, there is going to be a hands on training for embryo biopsy next mont...
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Line 12, column 159, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...iopsy next month at Mayflower Hospital, i would like to attend that to improve my...
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Line 14, column 63, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...oles for last year, and looking forward to hear your suggestion about the training requ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, second, so, apart from, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1026.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 214.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79439252336 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54814747524 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 127.690721649 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.663551401869 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.0872597507 44.8134815571 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 114.0 76.5299724578 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7777777778 16.8248392259 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 4.34317383033 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238084962389 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946690606557 0.0766984524023 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847206009731 0.0603063233224 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0747051991453 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669764306397 0.0580467560999 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 8.37731958763 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 70.7449484536 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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