Writing to a hotel manager

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Writing to a hotel manager

Dear Mr Janson

I'm writing this letter in connection with organizing a one-week trip for a group of students from Perth to the snowy mountainous areas in New South Wales. We are going to set a camp in the high altitude of southern mountains, however, we need an appropriate accommodation for the first and last night. Moreover, we need rooms to replace and settle our climbing equipment in New South Wales.

This is a group of 25 students in age groups between 20 to 25. It contains 10 girls and 15 boys, and all of them are classmates of a technical school in Perth. It is better to have double rooms all located on one floor of the hotel. However, because of not staying for a long time they can be grouped into 3 or 4 people in rooms as well. But, the bathroom and toilet are mandatory for each room and our preference is not to be shared between the rooms.

I will be so thankful if you can finalize our reservation after receiving my letter. I look forward to replying on this letter and fix any other issues before our travel which is last week of July.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
Dear Mr Janson Im writing this letter in connection with ...
^^
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'appropriate accommodation'.
Suggestion: appropriate accommodation
...of southern mountains, however, we need an appropriate accommodation for the first and last night. Moreover,...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 874.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 199.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39195979899 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48885295479 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64824120603 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.7017349683 44.8134815571 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 4.34317383033 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0462618870259 0.216113520407 21% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0175598930329 0.0766984524023 23% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364530350748 0.0603063233224 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0251782207201 0.12726935374 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017842713582 0.0580467560999 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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