You are going to another country to study . you will like to do a part-time job.While you are studying , so you want to ask a friend lives there for some help.Write a letter to this friend. İn your letter ,-give details of your study plans.- explain why

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study . you will like to do a part-time job.
While you are studying , so you want to ask a friend lives there for some help.

Write a letter to this friend. İn your letter ,

-give details of your study plans.
- explain why you want to get a part-time job.
-suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Kevin

I hope that you are very good and this letter finds you well.
I am writing this letter to inform you regarding my school program that I will attend and to get handful of advice from you.
As I have mentioned before that at last ,I have been accepted by Greenwich University as graduate student. You can imagine that how I am happy when I hear that. Since the program will be continue for four year , it would be perfect idea that working in some part-time jobs in order to cover tuition fees, cost of living and accommodation prices. I do not experience regarding finding jobs or interview with employers therefore you could check on some jobs advertisement around your zone where you live for me ? As you know I worked as a waiter barman and ball boy in high school years that why I can do it whatever you find related to job.

Thank you for your help and I know that I owe something in the near future.

All the best

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Kevin I hope that you are very good and this l...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... As I have mentioned before that at last ,I have been accepted by Greenwich Univer...
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Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e program will be continue for four year , it would be perfect idea that working i...
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Line 5, column 452, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'jobs'' or 'job's'?
Suggestion: jobs'; job's
...oyers therefore you could check on some jobs advertisement around your zone where yo...
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Line 5, column 512, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...round your zone where you live for me ? As you know I worked as a waiter barman ...
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Line 9, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hing in the near future. All the best
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
regarding, so, therefore, well, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.03092783505 330% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 768.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38857142857 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34825803728 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.674285714286 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2599282765 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3333333333 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 4.34317383033 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375936281569 0.216113520407 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144957459593 0.0766984524023 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944005163054 0.0603063233224 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241503298922 0.12726935374 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322875393235 0.0580467560999 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.