You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter:give details of your study plansexplain why yo

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter:

give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Sara,

My departure date for Canada is drawing near, and I am busy with preparations. I have enrolled at an institution called ‘IDT English’ in Ottawa, for a four-month intermediate course, full-time. It is quite expensive but I am hopeful of improving my pronunciation, especially.

To assist in covering the costs of my study, I aim to find a part-time job. Not only are the college fees rather high, but also I know that rental accommodation in the capital city will not be cheap, to say nothing of food and heating expenses! So I would very much like to arrange some temporary employment before I arrive.

I was wondering if you could ask around among your friends and colleagues to see if anyone wants a house-cleaner, gardener, or nanny for their children. I know you have a wide social network in Ottawa which you could canvas for me, if you wouldn't mind. I'd be so grateful.

I look forward to seeing you soon.

Best wishes,

Helen

Votes
Average: 9 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
..., for a four month intermediate course, full time. It is quite expensive but I am hopeful...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... the costs of my study, I aim to find a part time job. Not only are the college fees rath...
^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'as for']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21568627451 0.220444632235 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.156862745098 0.167888034529 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0637254901961 0.0606518309736 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0686274509804 0.0506257000042 136% => OK
Pronouns: 0.107843137255 0.118615021944 91% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112745098039 0.107062808482 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0343137254902 0.041066498444 84% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80262814705 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0294117647059 0.0385302599488 76% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00132118243153 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0441176470588 0.0714148451538 62% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0196078431373 0.0191574576366 102% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00490196078431 0.00930345855455 53% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 974.0 1141.60824742 85% => OK
No of words: 171.0 206.134020619 83% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69590643275 5.53046319177 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.78085437643 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.304093567251 0.284621296913 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.222222222222 0.211203875043 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.140350877193 0.133321485273 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116959064327 0.0843313296314 139% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80262814705 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.730994152047 0.622163163488 117% => OK
Word variations: 86.9135065482 62.8969750728 138% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 12.9587628866 85% => OK
Sentence length: 15.5454545455 16.4300151701 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.38448729 44.7399317507 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5454545455 90.9928171075 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5454545455 16.4300151701 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.613754768223 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 7.22680412371 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Readability: 37.7676767677 37.5504026743 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.08823529412 1.13073093955 96% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334714289213 0.331212695627 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0624955807471 0.0927372745006 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0705622512105 0.0736520305886 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.671928459507 0.662452444078 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.251843557641 0.233577193048 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112241518122 0.122183219658 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967828684088 0.0765303033291 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.048682639705 0.110270004696 44% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0535156376424 0.120535355502 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110527602273 0.120397337282 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117485375827 0.113578534861 103% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.45360824742 80% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.48453608247 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.0206185567 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 4.54639175258 88% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 1.0824742268 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.62886597938 190% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 8.25773195876 109% => OK

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 8.0 Out of 9