You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, So you want to ask a friend who live there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans. Explain why you want to go part-time job. Suggest how your friend would help you.
Dear Mans,
I am writing to let you know that I applied for Art University in Vancouver and they accepted. So I’ll arrive there on 27th of November, because my classes start the day after the time. I rented a hostel for this semester and if everything goes well, I’ll find a new apartment near university.
Let me explain the disasters that happened to my family. When you migrated to Canada, as you knew my father had been work as a CEO of the industrial factory but two years ago the factory, fall in bankruptcy. Therefore, all my family member has been work to pay the expenses. Even though, I got fund from my university, but for saving money and sending too my family, I should get a part-time job.
Would you kindly help me to find my appropriate job while I’m studying there? Since the art center of Vancouver searched for an art expert, I sent my resume on LinkedIn and they called me to have an interview as a part-time employee. Because of that, I ask if it is possible for you to recommend me, hence, you work there as an accounting manager for 4 years.
I look forward to your response.
Best wishes,
Shima
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mans, I am writing to let you know that I appl...
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Line 7, column 18, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...et a part-time job. Would you kindly help me to find my appropriate job while I'm study...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 943.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 207.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55555555556 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60185182071 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 127.690721649 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652173913043 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 290.7 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.83505154639 327% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5902632836 44.8134815571 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.5833333333 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 4.34317383033 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224153774598 0.216113520407 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792701032571 0.0766984524023 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705566203519 0.0603063233224 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131871672282 0.12726935374 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445286524578 0.0580467560999 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 8.37731958763 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.