You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter- Give details of your study plans- Explain why

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- Give details of your study plans
- Explain why you want to get a part-time job
- Suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Jacob,

Hope you are doing well.

As you are aware that I'm relocating to wimbeldon next month. I'll be joining Peters University for a period of two years. I've got admission in post-graduation course there.

Fortunately, my classes will be in the evening. Hence, I'll be having an ample amount of time to earn some pocket money. I am keen to do a part-time work in my leisure time. Also, I am quite proficient at doing accounts and data entry job because of my prior experience in the home country.

I shall be grateful if you could connect me to your references. However, it is not a compulsion. I will be glad even if you can share some links of job portals where I can directly connect with the employers. I will be appreciate your help.

I look forward to hearing soon from you.

Best regards,
Jessica

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r Jacob, Hope you are doing well. As you are aware that Im relocating to wim...
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Line 5, column 23, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...re doing well. As you are aware that Im relocating to wimbeldon next month. Ill...
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Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
... Im relocating to wimbeldon next month. Ill be joining Peters University for a peri...
^^^
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...s University for a period of two years. Ive got admission in post-graduation course...
^^^
Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
... classes will be in the evening. Hence, Ill be having an ample amount of time to ea...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ers. I will be appreciate your help. I look forward to hearing soon from you. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, look, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 681.0 937.175257732 73% => OK
No of words: 148.0 206.0 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60135135135 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48791127476 3.78020617076 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67645190761 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.716216216216 0.622605031667 115% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 290.88556701 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 16.3608247423 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.663530853 44.8134815571 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 48.6428571429 76.5299724578 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 10.5714285714 16.8248392259 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 4.34317383033 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217786177966 0.216113520407 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690366208127 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588131219048 0.0603063233224 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132426044437 0.12726935374 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529251865881 0.0580467560999 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.5 8.37731958763 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.25 70.7449484536 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 7.45979381443 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.22 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 8.62886597938 58% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 8.54432989691 70% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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