You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans explain

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,

give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Sara,

My departure date for Canada is drawing near, and I am busy with preparations. I have enrolled at an institution called ‘IDT English’ in Ottawa, for a four-month intermediate course, full-time. It is quite expensive but I am hopeful of improving my pronunciation, especially.

To assist in covering the costs of my study, I aim to find a part-time job. Not only are the college fees rather high, but also I know that rental accommodation in the capital city will not be cheap, to say nothing of food and heating expenses! So I would very much like to arrange some temporary employment before I arrive.

I was wondering if you could ask around among your friends and colleagues to see if anyone wants a house-cleaner, gardener, or nanny for their children. I know you have a wide social network in Ottawa which you could canvas for me, if you wouldn't mind. I'd be so grateful.

I look forward to seeing you soon.

Best wishes,

Helen

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 240, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...a which you could canvas for me, if you wouldnt mind. Id be so grateful. I look forw...
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Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...uld canvas for me, if you wouldnt mind. Id be so grateful. I look forward to se...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 805.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82035928144 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96338829595 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.724550898204 0.622605031667 116% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.758953763 44.8134815571 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 4.34317383033 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263680266002 0.216113520407 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811194536536 0.0766984524023 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814622974465 0.0603063233224 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139941860385 0.12726935374 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101977103417 0.0580467560999 176% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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