You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before.Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter,give details of your course and your arrival/departure dateexplain your accommodatio

Essay topics:

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter,

give details of your course and your arrival/departure date
explain your accommodation needs
ask for information about getting to and fro from the college

Dear sir,

In am writing in context to the availability of accommodation in the vicinity of college 'St.Stephen's' in New York. I have enrolled for a short-term management training program in the same.

My course will commence on the 1st of September 2018 and end on 31st January 2019. Henceforth, I would be arriving much in advance and I am completely unaware of the city's surroundings and lifestyle. Therefore, my flight is scheduled for 16th October 2018 midnight thereby I will reach New York on the 17th of October 2018.

My requirement is of a studio apartment which is in close proximity to my college. Moreover, a semi-furnished one would suffice with basic necessities like heating and it would be bitter cold during Christmas. Subsequently, I plan to vacate the premises in three months time as my departure date is 14th February 2019.

I would also like to inquire as to how I can commute from college to my apartment and vice versa and what would be the cost for the same. I would be really obliged if you could equip me with the aforementioned details so that I can plan accordingly. Thanking you in advance and looking forward for an early reply.

Yours faithfully,
Nick

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: AM_I[1]
Message: Did you mean 'am I'?
Suggestion: am I
Dear sir, In am writing in context to the availability ...
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Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Stephens
...mmodation in the vicinity of college St.Stephens in New York. I have enrolled for a shor...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 53, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'proximity'.
Suggestion: proximity
...nt is of a studio apartment which is in close proximity to my college. Moreover, a semi-furnish...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...a semi-furnished one would suffice with basic necessities like heating and it would be bitter col...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, hence, if, look, moreover, really, so, therefore, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 994.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 206.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82524271845 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96391723129 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611650485437 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 305.1 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0039060116 44.8134815571 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8333333333 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 4.34317383033 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121267942331 0.216113520407 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489668852496 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537688237331 0.0603063233224 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0568032254354 0.12726935374 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384477934998 0.0580467560999 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 8.71597938144 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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