You are organising a trip to Paris France for a group of students from England Write to the manager of the Youth Hostel Association in Paris In your letter explain when you want to visit Paris how long you will stay how many students are in your party and

Essay topics:

You are organising a trip to Paris, France for a group of students from England.

Write to the manager of the Youth Hostel Association in Paris. In your letter, explain

when you want to visit Paris
how long you will stay
how many students are in your party, and what accommodation you will require

Dear sir or madam
My name is Charles Oxford from the King Leopold private school of Wessex. I am currently planning the annual trip for the senior class of our school. For the past five years, we had travelled to Italy and Spain. However, this year Paris has been chosen as the destination for our graduates.

The trip will take place the last week of November from the 10th to the 16th. We think it is a good time for our students to visit the city. Our class is 25 people from 16 to 18 years old. We will require about ten rooms. Every room must be shared by at least three students. Accordingly, the price will still be affordable and we will be able to go to Disneyland on the weekend.

Finally, I would like to know more about the group discount you could offer us if we end up making the reservation with you.

Hope to have your reply soon.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, finally, however, if, so, still, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 696.0 937.175257732 74% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2962962963 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18985342191 2.54303337028 86% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.716049382716 0.622605031667 115% => OK
syllable_count: 202.5 290.88556701 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.9427118572 44.8134815571 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 58.0 76.5299724578 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5 16.8248392259 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 4.34317383033 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177921227076 0.216113520407 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538683429915 0.0766984524023 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368554253137 0.0603063233224 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0933520206343 0.12726935374 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186447326473 0.0580467560999 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.6 8.37731958763 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 70.7449484536 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 7.45979381443 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.07 8.71597938144 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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