You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Monday and Wednesday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.Write a letter to the manager of the community hall.

Essay topics:

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Monday and Wednesday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.

Write a letter to the manager of the community hall. In the letter:

describe what the group does

explain why the group is good for the community

suggest alternative days and times for practice

Write at least 150 words.

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to put a request in front of you regarding the community hall you run, on behalf of my group of musicians. I have come to know from notice board that the Community Hall is no longer available for us to practice.

As you might know that our band not only plays folk music but also represent our state on international level. Moreover, many tourists come to watch our monthly concert.

Owing these facts, our band helps to boost the economy. Here, I would like to mention one more thing that we also play for charity purposes. We committed to work community and perform at least two concerts every year which we dedicate to orphanage.

Therefore, I would like to suggestion in the changing of our schedule. If you allow us then we can come on any other days in the morning or afternoon as the Community Hall is busy in the evening time.

I hope you will consider my request.

Yours sincerely,

Aman

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ity Hall is busy in the evening time. I hope you will consider my request. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65680473373 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46839906474 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.668639053254 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8861837177 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.5454545455 76.5299724578 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3636363636 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 4.34317383033 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240415786676 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766608224412 0.0766984524023 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093752150868 0.0603063233224 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13131966818 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125358880071 0.0580467560999 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 8.37731958763 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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