Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed.What is the reason for doing this?Is this a negative or positive development?

Essay topics:

Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed.

What is the reason for doing this?

Is this a negative or positive development?

In this contemporary era, parents put lots of stress on their children to get success. With the increase of competition, individual feel anxious about their children’s future; however, this is totally a negative development.

Competition among the new generation at the peak level. Owing to this parents feel that if they do not nurture their children to get succeed then they will never become able to fulfill their dreams. Therefore, the encourage their dears ones to take science field as their career even they do not take care about the interest of them in that particular field. For instance, according to survey conducted by Cambridge University that the 90 % student do not choose their field according to their interest even knowing them that their children are not happy with that field which is chosen by them , they force them to study hard to get higher marks rather then give them freedom to choose their own path to study.

This stress will demolish the life of children in future. Children who are week in Math and Science get depressed with the fear of their parents. Moreover they afraid from their parents’s unfriendly behavior. Consequently, sometimes commit suicide when failed in these subject after trying their best. To exemplify this, A survey conducted by WHO, 25% of pupils commit suicide on world wide whose parents put pressure on them to get higher marks and get succeed in every way of their life. Along with this, 10 % suffered from depression for their entire life.

In conclusion, increased competition is the main reason to pressure on children to get succeed in every field and this is totally a negative development because so many student lost their life and some of them spend their entire life under pressure.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05802047782 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57573159733 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525597269625 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.8885566739 49.4020404114 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33576181386 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135410749518 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793707726672 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237413981106 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368499077947 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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