You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall You have been told however that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall Write a letter to the manager In the letter describe what

Essay topics:

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall.

You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.

Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:

describe what the group does
explain why the group is good for the community
suggest alternative days and times for practice
You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Manager,

I hope this letter finds you in a great health. With the heavy heart, I am writing to request an alternative time slot to practice in the community hall.

To start, I am a member of the One Direction band. Our group has been practicing in your hall every Tuesday and Friday evenings since a year now. While the band works at a small scale, it works for the charity. 70% of revenue earned from the local show is given to the Orphan Trust. You may please check the records. It is nothing, but a side hustle for few passionate musicians.

This community hall has helped us throughout the practice sessions. Majorly, it is been a good place to learn the instruments. If we would not get place to rehearse, the performance will degrade and hence the charity. And we do not want this reason to hinder our target. Considering your hall to be the perfect, we wish to continue with the sessions. Therefore I request to kindly suggest some other schedule. We are fine with Saturday and Sunday anytime. Please let us know.

Thanking you in anticipation,

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,
Jonas

Votes
Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the community hall. To start, I am a member of the One Direction band. Our gr...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e hustle for few passionate musicians. This community hall has helped us throug...
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Line 7, column 352, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... we wish to continue with the sessions. Therefore I request to kindly suggest some other ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, may, so, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 948.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 203.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66995073892 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54457220912 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645320197044 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 284.4 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.3742714896 44.8134815571 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 52.6666666667 76.5299724578 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.2777777778 16.8248392259 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61111111111 4.34317383033 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204843468012 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048774370132 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604458952526 0.0603063233224 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0946438189352 0.12726935374 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595963513588 0.0580467560999 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 8.37731958763 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 70.7449484536 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.62 8.71597938144 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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